Structurally, I might position this intro differently and explain a few more things to the reader. You are comparing two completely different systems--remember that. You need to show their specific differences and hang ups. I'd keep most of the first paragraph, minus the transition at the end. Then, Paragraph 2--History. How did ESI become such a dependant structure in the U.S.? (You have this in your HA Intro) Paragraph 3-- You'll explain how the French System works Paragraph 4--Solution; who, what, when, and why is suggesting we adopt a French style National Health Care system. a.) what would it look like in the U.S. What you are proposing is a drastic overhaul, correct? b.) who's opposed to it? c.) Why are they opposed? d.) Do they propose an alternative solution? e.) What are the obstacles to such a thing actually happening? This is more or less the thesis map at the end that will help structure the rest of the essay 21 mins ago
On the last part, part a, do you mean how the French system works? 18 mins ago
Ryan Hume
Paragraph 3-You'll explain how the French System works. in a.) you'll explain what it would like in the U.S. either supplementing or replacing replacin g ESI, which is your topic 14 mins ago
Ryan Hume
* I meant to say a.) what would it look like in the U.S. What you are proposing p roposing is a drastic overhaul, correct? 12 mins ago
Ryan Hume
You need to show that you understand the feasability of the undertaking and likely (or unlikely) it is. Or you could propose a more restrained solution. Like fighting for the alternative single payer system Obama originally had in the ACA
yes. I picture ESI would be more like a supplementary insurance, much like what the French does, with NHI being the main insurance 11 mins ago
Isn't the single-payer system like the French system? 10 mins ago
Now, both alternatives may not be feasible because of the economy down-turn, but it may be when the US is in better economy. Is that safe to say?
Ryan Hume
Yes, I think so. But it was an alternative meant to run next to private insurers. Someone could still buy private insurance if they wanted as their primary, but the single-payer collectives would influence the price of premiums in the market 8 mins ago
To influence the price of premiums, as if to regulate the affordability of premiums to the general public?
Ryan Hume
That was my understanding. But it was a while ago. I believe many companies supported that measure because it would lower their costs? 6 mins ago
Well, I'll look in to it, but thank you very much for your suggestions. Have a fantastic week, Ryan! And it's been a pleasure this quarter to have you as my instructor! :-)
Ryan Hume
Thanks, Vivian. And your draft will be returning soon. Have a good break