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Price 1 Jenna Price Ms. Caruso ENGL 1101 26 September 2011 iPhone 4
Jenna Price 12/6/11 8:53 PM
When someone mentions the word “iPhone”, I automatically think about my phone. With text messaging, facetime, e-mail, Internet, camera/video, iPod access, and games, the iPhone has become one of the most popular cellular devices around the world. The main features that come with the iPhone are a photo shop, calculator, maps, compass, stocks, weather, YouTube, note pad, clock, contact information and a calendar. All of these features are going to be explained throughout the writing of this paper. An iPhone might also be known as a “smartphone” because it allows so many opportunities. For those of you that have never heard of an iPhone; it is a device used for many, many things. The main purpose the iPhone is used for is making a phone call and this often catches the attention of business people. Many business people purchase the iPhone because it is great for e-mail and communication, but all different types of people such as teenagers, etc use the iPhone. I am going to start with the appearance of the iPhone 4 and then move on to speaking about everything that the iPhone is capable of doing. The iPhone 4 is the most updated iPhone. Before the iPhone 4, there was a 1st, 2nd, and 3 iPhone. Supposedly, the iPhone 4 has faster Internet access and clearer phone calls . (Shaer). Personal experiences have proven this theory. As long as the iPhone has a 3G network, Internet access is available anywhere at anytime. There is a significant amount of difference between the signal of a smartphone, like the iPhone, and a basic cellular phone. The signal that an iPhone has is a great deal better! It is a very small device and because of this people may not realize how
rd
Deleted:
Beth Caruso 10/7/11 10:57 AM
Comment [1]: Use
more
specific
wording
here,
or
combing
this
sentence
with
another
to
make
your
wording
tighter.
Jenna Price 12/6/11 8:54 PM Deleted: . Beth Caruso 10/7/11 10:58 AM Comment [2]: This
poses
your
paper
as
more
of
a
spoken
discussion,
rather
than
as
a
formal
paper.
Jenna Price 12/5/11 8:36 PM Deleted: . I Jenna Price 12/5/11 8:39 PM Deleted: plan on telling you all about the iPhone 4 and what it can do, but first Beth Caruso 10/7/11 11:15 AM
Comment [3]: In
order
to
make
your
introduction
catchier,
try
to
structure
it
a
bit
more
by
including
the
ideas
you
will
actually
talk
about
in
your
paper.
It
is
difficult
to
type
out
exactly
what
to
do
in
your
intro.
Let
me
know
if
you’d
like
to
meet
to
work
on
it.
Jenna Price 12/6/11 8:56 PM Comment [4]: I
changed
some
things
throughout
this
paragraph
so
it
wouldn’t
be
such
a
discussion
and
more
about
a
formal
paper.
Jenna Price 12/5/11 9:53 PM Deleted: . Beth Caruso 10/7/11 10:59 AM Comment [5]: Rather
than
just
saying
this,
tell
your
audience
if
you
have
noticed
any
of
these
differences
and
how
clear
of
a
change
they
may
pose
to
the
workings
of
the
phone.
Jenna Price 12/6/11 9:02 PM Comment [6]: By
adding
these
sentences,
I
explained
the
differences
that
I
have
noticed
personally.
Jenna Price 12/5/11 9:53 PM
Deleted:
Price 2 “smart” the iPhone actually is. The iPhone is somewhat rectangular and thin. It has more height than a normal phone would probably have, but it barely has a width. You have a choice of two colors, black or white. The white seems to be the more popular color because it has only been out for a short amount of time. Many people seem to have leaned more towards the white just to be different and also because it is a newer version. I chose the black iPhone 4 because it appeared a lot more professional. The Droid is also a new phone that has just recently come out. When comparing the iPhone 4 to a Droid, the iPhone gets better reviews. Both phones are extremely fast, have a ton of apps to choose from and are loaded with multimedia features. (Miles) The camera, display and camcorder are proven to be stronger on the iPhone. (Miles) Other than these differences, the iPhone and Droid are pretty similar. Depending on which one to choose from relies on how big someone wishes his or her phone to be. The Droids are fairly larger than the iPhone and can become somewhat difficult to carry around in certain situations. The one advantage that the Droid has over the iPhone is the Droid is not only touchscreen, but has a keyboard as well. The iPhone is only touchscreen and that could become annoying after a while. Therefore, the iPhone and the Droid are very similar when compared and when choosing one over the other there wouldn’t be any disadvantage. The phone company (Verizon or AT&T) will give you a choice of how many gigabytes, or the capacity of storage space available, you wish to have on your iPhone. (“gigabyte.com”) Just like the color, there are two different sets of gigabytes you can choose from. There is a sixteen-gigabyte iPhone and a thirty-two gigabyte iPhone. Depending on how much money someone is willing to spend will determine what gigabyte they will want. Obviously, the thirtytwo gigabyte is going to require more money because it allows a larger amount of space for
Jenna Price 12/6/11 9:07 PM Comment [7]: I
added
this
comment
to
give
more
examples
of
why
people
would
have
chosen
the
white
iPhone.
Jenna Price 12/6/11 9:05 PM Deleted: . Beth Caruso 10/7/11 11:00 AM Comment [8]: Although
you
seem
to
contain
the
updates
within
this
paragraph,
and
you
do
give
an
introductory
sentence
to
show
that,
work
on
analyzing
the
ideas
you
have
here,
rather
than
just
telling
about
them.
The
paragraph
will
sound
less
like
a
list.
Beth Caruso 10/7/11 11:01 AM Comment [9]: You
may
want
to
talk
more
about
the
iPhone
before
you
get
into
another
text.
If
you
clearly
articulate
your
ideas
about
the
iPhone
and
analyze
its
characteristics,
your
paper
will
then
naturally
open
itself
to
inquiry
about
another
phone.
Beth Caruso 10/7/11 11:02 AM Comment [10]: Be
sure
you
are
closing
your
paragraphs.
Rather
than
just
dropping
a
paragraph
after
your
last
idea,
give
a
wrap-‐up
of
the
main
idea
of
the
paragraph.
Jenna Price 12/6/11 9:08 PM
Comment [11]: I
added
this
comment
to
“close”
the
paragraph.
Jenna Price 12/6/11 9:09 PM Comment [12]: I
rearranged
this
sentence
to
clean
it
up
a
little
bit.
Beth Caruso 10/7/11 11:04 AM Comment [13]: Rather
than
including
this,
since
most
people
now
(who
would
be
reading
about
an
iPhone)
would
know
about
gigabytes,
you
can
just
include
a
phrase
after
the
word
in
the
previous
sentence.
Ex:
…
how
many
gigabytes,
or
how
big
of
a
storage
capacity
you
wish
to
have
on
your
iPhone.
Jenna Price 12/5/11 10:42 PM Deleted: Jenna Price 12/5/11 10:43 PM
Deleted: Gigabyte is “a measure of storage capacity equal to 1 billion.”
Price 3
Beth Caruso 10/7/11 11:04 AM
pictures, videos, songs, etc. I chose the thirty-two gigabyte so that I would be provided a lot of space to keep the memorable moments, my favorite songs, and other special things that define me. The prices seem to rise with every new version of iPhone that comes out. This is because each iPhone is more updated and has a lot more features than the previous one. The iPhone 4 is very protected with insurance. Some people choose not to buy insurance on their iPhone, but I strongly recommend that they do. If the iPhone is dropped, cracked, etc. it will be replaced by a new iPhone with no questions asked! There are also many cover cases that are invented specifically for the iPhone. The cases come in any color or texture and they all work very well in protecting the iPhone. The Apple Company has thought about the many ways of protection and what is easiest for the buyers. However, my only suggestion would be to lower the prices of the protective hardware. A neat feature of the iPhone is facetime. Facetime enables you to chat with friends through an online video chat but it is completely mobile. Out of all the versions of the iPhone, the iPhone 4 is the only one that provides facetime. Skype is a very commonly used video chatting application. Skype is something used on a computer where you can “video chat” with one another. It allows two people to talk back and forth while being able to see the other person’s face and hear their voice. Facetime is very similar to skype except for facetime can be used anywhere and everywhere as long as wireless is present! Facetime is already built into the iPhone and ready for use as soon as the iPhone is purchased. The only disadvantage that comes with facetime is it can only be used with someone else who has an iPhone. Another really cool feature that comes automatically with purchasing the iPhone 4 is the built-in iPod. An iPod is an MP3 player that carries music so that music can be heard on the go.
Comment [14]: Why
does
this
matter?
Does
this
influence
the
purpose
of
the
phone
and
how
it
works?
Jenna Price 12/6/11 9:09 PM Comment [15]: I
added
this
comment
to
show
why
it
matters
to
have
a
lot
of
space.
Beth Caruso 10/7/11 11:06 AM Comment [16]: This
paragraph
seems
to
be
about
benefits
and
downfalls
of
the
iPhone,
but
you
need
to
give
analysis
of
it
and
possibly
make
suggestions
about
how
it
could
be
better.
Jenna Price 12/6/11 9:12 PM Comment [17]: I
added
this
sentence
to
show
how
the
Apple
Company
is
working
everyday
to
better
improve
the
iPhone.
Jenna Price 12/6/11 9:13 PM
Comment [18]: I
changed
this
around
so
the
attention
wouldn’t
be
all
on
me.
Beth Caruso 10/7/11 11:06 AM Comment [19]: This
sentence
acts
as
filler
and
calls
attention
to
you,
rather
than
to
the
phone.
Jenna Price 12/5/11 10:51 PM Deleted: As mentioned at the top of the paper, I would like to elaborate more on the ... [1] Beth Caruso 10/7/11 11:06 AM Comment [20]: This
is
extremely
conversational.
Jenna Price 12/5/11 10:52 PM
Deleted: Has anyone ever heard of skype? If not,
Jenna Price 12/5/11 10:52 PM Deleted: s Jenna Price 12/6/11 9:13 PM Comment [21]: I
took
the
below
comment
out
because
it
seemed
pointless.
Jenna Price 12/6/11 9:13 PM Deleted: For example: if you have an iPhone and your friend has a droid, then you ... [2] Beth Caruso 10/7/11 11:08 AM
Comment [22]: Begin
a
new
paragraph,
since
you
begin
a
new
idea.
Beth Caruso 10/7/11 11:08 AM Comment [23]: Conversational
Jenna Price 12/5/11 10:52 PM Formatted: Indent: First line: 0.5" Jenna Price 12/5/11 10:53 PM Deleted: Surely everyone has heard of an iPod? If not, Jenna Price 12/5/11 10:53 PM
Deleted: a
Price 4 When the iPhone 4 is purchased, earphones are part of the package deal. Simply plug the earphones into the iPhone and begin listening to music. If a phone call happens to come through while the music is playing, the music will stop and the phone call can be taken. Leave the earphones in and you can hear the caller through the earphones! The iPod is a really big plus when purchasing the iPhone. Not only do you receive a cell phone, but an iPod as well! This feature reminds me of the phrase “knocking out two birds with one stone” because the iPhone contains two great inventions for the price of one. The iPhone also comes with an app store. The app store contains many categories to choose from. The categories are as follows; games, entertainment, utilities, social networking, music, productivity, lifestyle, reference, travel, sports, navigation, health & fitness, news, photo & video, finance, business, education, weather, books and medical. The app store is an awesome feature that only requires a username and password to download anything that is desired! While some apps require money, there are plenty of apps that are free to download. Some of the more popular apps are the social networking apps such as Facebook, twitter, or MySpace. Instead of going to the Internet, typing in facebook.com then typing in a username and password, why not just download the Facebook app? With one touch on the Facebook app, it will go straight to the desired page, making your facebook account viewable and accessible at any time, just like it would be on the computer. The iPhone 4 is very popular for its text messaging and e-mail. The text messaging is very fast and simple. It has a setting that is called “auto-correct”. Auto-correct makes the text messaging on an iPhone a lot more enjoyable. While in a hurry, if a misspelled word is typed the auto-correct will automatically correct the spelling. Like any piece of technical equipment, there will always be a few defaults and auto-correct might not catch every mistake or change it to the
Beth Caruso 10/7/11 11:10 AM Comment [27]: Does
it
always
work?
Think
of
all
of
those
websites
dedicated
to
autocorrect
gone
wrong.
Beth Caruso 10/7/11 11:09 AM Comment [26]: Why
does
this
matter?
Rather
than
just
summarizing
the
features,
give
analysis.
Beth Caruso 10/7/11 11:09 AM Comment [24]: Rather
than
just
commenting
on
this
as
being
a
good
thing,
tell
why
it
is
a
good
thing
and
how
it
is
perfect
for
achieving
the
purpose
it
set
out
to
achieve.
Jenna Price 12/5/11 10:54 PM Deleted: Jenna Price 12/6/11 9:14 PM
Comment [25]: By
adding
this
sentence,
I
gave
an
example
of
why
the
iPhone
is
so
“great”
Price 5 word that you desire. Another neat feature involving the text messaging is the fact that when a new message is received, it pops up on the front of the phone with whom the message is from and what the message reads. If you do not like this feature then it is very simple to remove just by going to the “settings” section of the iPhone. The e-mail is extremely easy to set up. The iPhone settings guide the user right through the process. Many business people have more than one email, one for their personal life and one for the business side of things. No worries, with the iPhone 4 both emails can be set up to come straight to the iPhone! This is what makes the email feature so popular. The iPhone 4 is produced by the “Apple” company and is known all around the world. There has already been talk about an iPhone 5 coming to stores very soon. With all the features and the opportunities that the iPhone 4 already carries, it is hard to imagine the company producing a newer, better version of the iPhone. We will just have to wait and see. Technology surprises us everyday!
Beth Caruso 10/7/11 11:13 AM Comment [29]: Jenna,
You
include
some
excellent
ideas
within
this
paper,
but
my
main
suggestion
for
you
would
be
to
analyze
what
you
say,
rather
than
just
continuing
to
talk
about
how
good
these
features
are.
How
did
these
features
make
the
iPhone
what
it
is?
How
well
is
the
concept
of
a
smartphone
achieved
through
this
iPhone?
Also,
be
aware
of
the
language
you
use
to
talk
about
your
ideas.
You
have
a
great
deal
of
informal
language
choices,
which
we
can
certainly
work
on
together,
if
you
need
help
with
them.
You
have
a
great
paper
here.
Just
be
sure
to
analyze,
rather
than
summarize.
-‐Ms.
C
Jenna Price 12/6/11 9:17 PM Comment [28]: I
tried
to
add
this
comment
to
show
that
auto-‐correct
does
not
ALWAYS
work.
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Works Cited
-
S h a e r, M a t t h e w. " i P h o n e 4 v e r s u s i P h o n e 3 . " H o r i z o n s . N.p., 10/06/2010. We b . 3 Oct 2011.
< h t t p : / / w w w. c s m o n i t o r. c o m / I n n o v a t i o n / H o r i z o n s / 2 0 1 0 / 0 610/iPhone-4-versus-iPhone-3G-S-A-buyer-s-guide>. M i l e s , G i n n y. " i P h o n e 4 v e r s u s D r o i d . " P C w o r l d . N . p . , 25/06/2010. We b . 3 Oct 2011.
< h t t p : / / w w w. p c w o r l d . c o m / a r t i c l e / 1 9 9 8 4 4 / i p h o n e _ 4 _ v s _ d roid_x_a_headtohead_comparison.html>. "gigabyte." 2011. < h t t p : / / d i c t i o n a r y. r e f e r e n c e . c o m / b r o w s e / g i g a b y t e > . “ i P h o n e 4 ” . Ve r i z o n . 2 0 1 0 “ D r o i d ” . Ve r i z o n . 2 0 1 0 d i c t i o n a r y. c o m . N.p., 2011. We b . 4 Oct
Jenna Price 12/6/11 8:53 PM
When someone mentions the word “iPhone”, I automatically think about my phone. With text messaging, facetime, e-mail, Internet, camera/video, iPod access, and games, the iPhone has become one of the most popular cellular devices around the world. The main features that come with the iPhone are a photo shop, calculator, maps, compass, stocks, weather, YouTube, note pad, clock, contact information and a calendar. All of these features are going to be explained throughout the writing of this paper. An iPhone might also be known as a “smartphone” because it allows so many opportunities. For those of you that have never heard of an iPhone; it is a device used for many, many things. The main purpose the iPhone is used for is making a phone call and this often catches the attention of business people. Many business people purchase the iPhone because it is great for e-mail and communication, but all different types of people such as teenagers, etc use the iPhone. I am going to start with the appearance of the iPhone 4 and then move on to speaking about everything that the iPhone is capable of doing. The iPhone 4 is the most updated iPhone. Before the iPhone 4, there was a 1st, 2nd, and 3 iPhone. Supposedly, the iPhone 4 has faster Internet access and clearer phone calls . (Shaer). Personal experiences have proven this theory. As long as the iPhone has a 3G network, Internet access is available anywhere at anytime. There is a significant amount of difference between the signal of a smartphone, like the iPhone, and a basic cellular phone. The signal that an iPhone has is a great deal better! It is a very small device and because of this people may not realize how
rd
Deleted:
Beth Caruso 10/7/11 10:57 AM
Comment [1]: Use
more
specific
wording
here,
or
combing
this
sentence
with
another
to
make
your
wording
tighter.
Jenna Price 12/6/11 8:54 PM Deleted: . Beth Caruso 10/7/11 10:58 AM Comment [2]: This
poses
your
paper
as
more
of
a
spoken
discussion,
rather
than
as
a
formal
paper.
Jenna Price 12/5/11 8:36 PM Deleted: . I Jenna Price 12/5/11 8:39 PM Deleted: plan on telling you all about the iPhone 4 and what it can do, but first Beth Caruso 10/7/11 11:15 AM
Comment [3]: In
order
to
make
your
introduction
catchier,
try
to
structure
it
a
bit
more
by
including
the
ideas
you
will
actually
talk
about
in
your
paper.
It
is
difficult
to
type
out
exactly
what
to
do
in
your
intro.
Let
me
know
if
you’d
like
to
meet
to
work
on
it.
Jenna Price 12/6/11 8:56 PM Comment [4]: I
changed
some
things
throughout
this
paragraph
so
it
wouldn’t
be
such
a
discussion
and
more
about
a
formal
paper.
Jenna Price 12/5/11 9:53 PM Deleted: . Beth Caruso 10/7/11 10:59 AM Comment [5]: Rather
than
just
saying
this,
tell
your
audience
if
you
have
noticed
any
of
these
differences
and
how
clear
of
a
change
they
may
pose
to
the
workings
of
the
phone.
Jenna Price 12/6/11 9:02 PM Comment [6]: By
adding
these
sentences,
I
explained
the
differences
that
I
have
noticed
personally.
Jenna Price 12/5/11 9:53 PM
Deleted:
Price 2 “smart” the iPhone actually is. The iPhone is somewhat rectangular and thin. It has more height than a normal phone would probably have, but it barely has a width. You have a choice of two colors, black or white. The white seems to be the more popular color because it has only been out for a short amount of time. Many people seem to have leaned more towards the white just to be different and also because it is a newer version. I chose the black iPhone 4 because it appeared a lot more professional. The Droid is also a new phone that has just recently come out. When comparing the iPhone 4 to a Droid, the iPhone gets better reviews. Both phones are extremely fast, have a ton of apps to choose from and are loaded with multimedia features. (Miles) The camera, display and camcorder are proven to be stronger on the iPhone. (Miles) Other than these differences, the iPhone and Droid are pretty similar. Depending on which one to choose from relies on how big someone wishes his or her phone to be. The Droids are fairly larger than the iPhone and can become somewhat difficult to carry around in certain situations. The one advantage that the Droid has over the iPhone is the Droid is not only touchscreen, but has a keyboard as well. The iPhone is only touchscreen and that could become annoying after a while. Therefore, the iPhone and the Droid are very similar when compared and when choosing one over the other there wouldn’t be any disadvantage. The phone company (Verizon or AT&T) will give you a choice of how many gigabytes, or the capacity of storage space available, you wish to have on your iPhone. (“gigabyte.com”) Just like the color, there are two different sets of gigabytes you can choose from. There is a sixteen-gigabyte iPhone and a thirty-two gigabyte iPhone. Depending on how much money someone is willing to spend will determine what gigabyte they will want. Obviously, the thirtytwo gigabyte is going to require more money because it allows a larger amount of space for
Jenna Price 12/6/11 9:07 PM Comment [7]: I
added
this
comment
to
give
more
examples
of
why
people
would
have
chosen
the
white
iPhone.
Jenna Price 12/6/11 9:05 PM Deleted: . Beth Caruso 10/7/11 11:00 AM Comment [8]: Although
you
seem
to
contain
the
updates
within
this
paragraph,
and
you
do
give
an
introductory
sentence
to
show
that,
work
on
analyzing
the
ideas
you
have
here,
rather
than
just
telling
about
them.
The
paragraph
will
sound
less
like
a
list.
Beth Caruso 10/7/11 11:01 AM Comment [9]: You
may
want
to
talk
more
about
the
iPhone
before
you
get
into
another
text.
If
you
clearly
articulate
your
ideas
about
the
iPhone
and
analyze
its
characteristics,
your
paper
will
then
naturally
open
itself
to
inquiry
about
another
phone.
Beth Caruso 10/7/11 11:02 AM Comment [10]: Be
sure
you
are
closing
your
paragraphs.
Rather
than
just
dropping
a
paragraph
after
your
last
idea,
give
a
wrap-‐up
of
the
main
idea
of
the
paragraph.
Jenna Price 12/6/11 9:08 PM
Comment [11]: I
added
this
comment
to
“close”
the
paragraph.
Jenna Price 12/6/11 9:09 PM Comment [12]: I
rearranged
this
sentence
to
clean
it
up
a
little
bit.
Beth Caruso 10/7/11 11:04 AM Comment [13]: Rather
than
including
this,
since
most
people
now
(who
would
be
reading
about
an
iPhone)
would
know
about
gigabytes,
you
can
just
include
a
phrase
after
the
word
in
the
previous
sentence.
Ex:
…
how
many
gigabytes,
or
how
big
of
a
storage
capacity
you
wish
to
have
on
your
iPhone.
Jenna Price 12/5/11 10:42 PM Deleted: Jenna Price 12/5/11 10:43 PM
Deleted: Gigabyte is “a measure of storage capacity equal to 1 billion.”
Price 3
Beth Caruso 10/7/11 11:04 AM
pictures, videos, songs, etc. I chose the thirty-two gigabyte so that I would be provided a lot of space to keep the memorable moments, my favorite songs, and other special things that define me. The prices seem to rise with every new version of iPhone that comes out. This is because each iPhone is more updated and has a lot more features than the previous one. The iPhone 4 is very protected with insurance. Some people choose not to buy insurance on their iPhone, but I strongly recommend that they do. If the iPhone is dropped, cracked, etc. it will be replaced by a new iPhone with no questions asked! There are also many cover cases that are invented specifically for the iPhone. The cases come in any color or texture and they all work very well in protecting the iPhone. The Apple Company has thought about the many ways of protection and what is easiest for the buyers. However, my only suggestion would be to lower the prices of the protective hardware. A neat feature of the iPhone is facetime. Facetime enables you to chat with friends through an online video chat but it is completely mobile. Out of all the versions of the iPhone, the iPhone 4 is the only one that provides facetime. Skype is a very commonly used video chatting application. Skype is something used on a computer where you can “video chat” with one another. It allows two people to talk back and forth while being able to see the other person’s face and hear their voice. Facetime is very similar to skype except for facetime can be used anywhere and everywhere as long as wireless is present! Facetime is already built into the iPhone and ready for use as soon as the iPhone is purchased. The only disadvantage that comes with facetime is it can only be used with someone else who has an iPhone. Another really cool feature that comes automatically with purchasing the iPhone 4 is the built-in iPod. An iPod is an MP3 player that carries music so that music can be heard on the go.
Comment [14]: Why
does
this
matter?
Does
this
influence
the
purpose
of
the
phone
and
how
it
works?
Jenna Price 12/6/11 9:09 PM Comment [15]: I
added
this
comment
to
show
why
it
matters
to
have
a
lot
of
space.
Beth Caruso 10/7/11 11:06 AM Comment [16]: This
paragraph
seems
to
be
about
benefits
and
downfalls
of
the
iPhone,
but
you
need
to
give
analysis
of
it
and
possibly
make
suggestions
about
how
it
could
be
better.
Jenna Price 12/6/11 9:12 PM Comment [17]: I
added
this
sentence
to
show
how
the
Apple
Company
is
working
everyday
to
better
improve
the
iPhone.
Jenna Price 12/6/11 9:13 PM
Comment [18]: I
changed
this
around
so
the
attention
wouldn’t
be
all
on
me.
Beth Caruso 10/7/11 11:06 AM Comment [19]: This
sentence
acts
as
filler
and
calls
attention
to
you,
rather
than
to
the
phone.
Jenna Price 12/5/11 10:51 PM Deleted: As mentioned at the top of the paper, I would like to elaborate more on the ... [1] Beth Caruso 10/7/11 11:06 AM Comment [20]: This
is
extremely
conversational.
Jenna Price 12/5/11 10:52 PM
Deleted: Has anyone ever heard of skype? If not,
Jenna Price 12/5/11 10:52 PM Deleted: s Jenna Price 12/6/11 9:13 PM Comment [21]: I
took
the
below
comment
out
because
it
seemed
pointless.
Jenna Price 12/6/11 9:13 PM Deleted: For example: if you have an iPhone and your friend has a droid, then you ... [2] Beth Caruso 10/7/11 11:08 AM
Comment [22]: Begin
a
new
paragraph,
since
you
begin
a
new
idea.
Beth Caruso 10/7/11 11:08 AM Comment [23]: Conversational
Jenna Price 12/5/11 10:52 PM Formatted: Indent: First line: 0.5" Jenna Price 12/5/11 10:53 PM Deleted: Surely everyone has heard of an iPod? If not, Jenna Price 12/5/11 10:53 PM
Deleted: a
Price 4 When the iPhone 4 is purchased, earphones are part of the package deal. Simply plug the earphones into the iPhone and begin listening to music. If a phone call happens to come through while the music is playing, the music will stop and the phone call can be taken. Leave the earphones in and you can hear the caller through the earphones! The iPod is a really big plus when purchasing the iPhone. Not only do you receive a cell phone, but an iPod as well! This feature reminds me of the phrase “knocking out two birds with one stone” because the iPhone contains two great inventions for the price of one. The iPhone also comes with an app store. The app store contains many categories to choose from. The categories are as follows; games, entertainment, utilities, social networking, music, productivity, lifestyle, reference, travel, sports, navigation, health & fitness, news, photo & video, finance, business, education, weather, books and medical. The app store is an awesome feature that only requires a username and password to download anything that is desired! While some apps require money, there are plenty of apps that are free to download. Some of the more popular apps are the social networking apps such as Facebook, twitter, or MySpace. Instead of going to the Internet, typing in facebook.com then typing in a username and password, why not just download the Facebook app? With one touch on the Facebook app, it will go straight to the desired page, making your facebook account viewable and accessible at any time, just like it would be on the computer. The iPhone 4 is very popular for its text messaging and e-mail. The text messaging is very fast and simple. It has a setting that is called “auto-correct”. Auto-correct makes the text messaging on an iPhone a lot more enjoyable. While in a hurry, if a misspelled word is typed the auto-correct will automatically correct the spelling. Like any piece of technical equipment, there will always be a few defaults and auto-correct might not catch every mistake or change it to the
Beth Caruso 10/7/11 11:10 AM Comment [27]: Does
it
always
work?
Think
of
all
of
those
websites
dedicated
to
autocorrect
gone
wrong.
Beth Caruso 10/7/11 11:09 AM Comment [26]: Why
does
this
matter?
Rather
than
just
summarizing
the
features,
give
analysis.
Beth Caruso 10/7/11 11:09 AM Comment [24]: Rather
than
just
commenting
on
this
as
being
a
good
thing,
tell
why
it
is
a
good
thing
and
how
it
is
perfect
for
achieving
the
purpose
it
set
out
to
achieve.
Jenna Price 12/5/11 10:54 PM Deleted: Jenna Price 12/6/11 9:14 PM
Comment [25]: By
adding
this
sentence,
I
gave
an
example
of
why
the
iPhone
is
so
“great”
Price 5 word that you desire. Another neat feature involving the text messaging is the fact that when a new message is received, it pops up on the front of the phone with whom the message is from and what the message reads. If you do not like this feature then it is very simple to remove just by going to the “settings” section of the iPhone. The e-mail is extremely easy to set up. The iPhone settings guide the user right through the process. Many business people have more than one email, one for their personal life and one for the business side of things. No worries, with the iPhone 4 both emails can be set up to come straight to the iPhone! This is what makes the email feature so popular. The iPhone 4 is produced by the “Apple” company and is known all around the world. There has already been talk about an iPhone 5 coming to stores very soon. With all the features and the opportunities that the iPhone 4 already carries, it is hard to imagine the company producing a newer, better version of the iPhone. We will just have to wait and see. Technology surprises us everyday!
Beth Caruso 10/7/11 11:13 AM Comment [29]: Jenna,
You
include
some
excellent
ideas
within
this
paper,
but
my
main
suggestion
for
you
would
be
to
analyze
what
you
say,
rather
than
just
continuing
to
talk
about
how
good
these
features
are.
How
did
these
features
make
the
iPhone
what
it
is?
How
well
is
the
concept
of
a
smartphone
achieved
through
this
iPhone?
Also,
be
aware
of
the
language
you
use
to
talk
about
your
ideas.
You
have
a
great
deal
of
informal
language
choices,
which
we
can
certainly
work
on
together,
if
you
need
help
with
them.
You
have
a
great
paper
here.
Just
be
sure
to
analyze,
rather
than
summarize.
-‐Ms.
C
Jenna Price 12/6/11 9:17 PM Comment [28]: I
tried
to
add
this
comment
to
show
that
auto-‐correct
does
not
ALWAYS
work.
Price 6
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