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Price 1 Jenna Price Ms. Caruso ENGL 1101 26 September 2011 iPhone 4
Jenna Price 12/6/11 8:53 PM

When someone mentions the word “iPhone”, I automatically think about my phone. With text messaging, facetime, e-mail, Internet, camera/video, iPod access, and games, the iPhone has become one of the most popular cellular devices around the world. The main features that come with the iPhone are a photo shop, calculator, maps, compass, stocks, weather, YouTube, note pad, clock, contact information and a calendar. All of these features are going to be explained throughout the writing of this paper. An iPhone might also be known as a “smartphone” because it allows so many opportunities. For those of you that have never heard of an iPhone; it is a device used for many, many things. The main purpose the iPhone is used for is making a phone call and this often catches the attention of business people. Many business people purchase the iPhone because it is great for e-mail and communication, but all different types of people such as teenagers, etc use the iPhone. I am going to start with the appearance of the iPhone 4 and then move on to speaking about everything that the iPhone is capable of doing. The iPhone 4 is the most updated iPhone. Before the iPhone 4, there was a 1st, 2nd, and 3 iPhone. Supposedly, the iPhone 4 has faster Internet access and clearer phone calls . (Shaer). Personal experiences have proven this theory. As long as the iPhone has a 3G network, Internet access is available anywhere at anytime. There is a significant amount of difference between the signal of a smartphone, like the iPhone, and a basic cellular phone. The signal that an iPhone has is a great deal better! It is a very small device and because of this people may not realize how
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Beth Caruso 10/7/11 10:57 AM
Comment [1]: Use
 more
 specific
 wording
  here,
 or
 combing
 this
 sentence
 with
 another
  to
 make
 your
 wording
 tighter.
 

Jenna Price 12/6/11 8:54 PM Deleted: . Beth Caruso 10/7/11 10:58 AM Comment [2]: This
 poses
 your
 paper
 as
  more
 of
 a
 spoken
 discussion,
 rather
 than
 as
  a
 formal
 paper.
  Jenna Price 12/5/11 8:36 PM Deleted: . I Jenna Price 12/5/11 8:39 PM Deleted: plan on telling you all about the iPhone 4 and what it can do, but first Beth Caruso 10/7/11 11:15 AM
Comment [3]: In
 order
 to
 make
 your
  introduction
 catchier,
 try
 to
 structure
 it
 a
 bit
  more
 by
 including
 the
 ideas
 you
 will
 actually
  talk
 about
 in
 your
 paper.
 It
 is
 difficult
 to
  type
 out
 exactly
 what
 to
 do
 in
 your
 intro.
 Let
  me
 know
 if
 you’d
 like
 to
 meet
 to
 work
 on
 it.
 

Jenna Price 12/6/11 8:56 PM Comment [4]: I
 changed
 some
 things
  throughout
 this
 paragraph
 so
 it
 wouldn’t
 be
  such
 a
 discussion
 and
 more
 about
 a
 formal
  paper.
  Jenna Price 12/5/11 9:53 PM Deleted: . Beth Caruso 10/7/11 10:59 AM Comment [5]: Rather
 than
 just
 saying
  this,
 tell
 your
 audience
 if
 you
 have
 noticed
  any
 of
 these
 differences
 and
 how
 clear
 of
 a
  change
 they
 may
 pose
 to
 the
 workings
 of
 the
  phone.
  Jenna Price 12/6/11 9:02 PM Comment [6]: By
 adding
 these
 sentences,
  I
 explained
 the
 differences
 that
 I
 have
  noticed
 personally.
  Jenna Price 12/5/11 9:53 PM
Deleted:

Price 2 “smart” the iPhone actually is. The iPhone is somewhat rectangular and thin. It has more height than a normal phone would probably have, but it barely has a width. You have a choice of two colors, black or white. The white seems to be the more popular color because it has only been out for a short amount of time. Many people seem to have leaned more towards the white just to be different and also because it is a newer version. I chose the black iPhone 4 because it appeared a lot more professional. The Droid is also a new phone that has just recently come out. When comparing the iPhone 4 to a Droid, the iPhone gets better reviews. Both phones are extremely fast, have a ton of apps to choose from and are loaded with multimedia features. (Miles) The camera, display and camcorder are proven to be stronger on the iPhone. (Miles) Other than these differences, the iPhone and Droid are pretty similar. Depending on which one to choose from relies on how big someone wishes his or her phone to be. The Droids are fairly larger than the iPhone and can become somewhat difficult to carry around in certain situations. The one advantage that the Droid has over the iPhone is the Droid is not only touchscreen, but has a keyboard as well. The iPhone is only touchscreen and that could become annoying after a while. Therefore, the iPhone and the Droid are very similar when compared and when choosing one over the other there wouldn’t be any disadvantage. The phone company (Verizon or AT&T) will give you a choice of how many gigabytes, or the capacity of storage space available, you wish to have on your iPhone. (“gigabyte.com”) Just like the color, there are two different sets of gigabytes you can choose from. There is a sixteen-gigabyte iPhone and a thirty-two gigabyte iPhone. Depending on how much money someone is willing to spend will determine what gigabyte they will want. Obviously, the thirtytwo gigabyte is going to require more money because it allows a larger amount of space for
Jenna Price 12/6/11 9:07 PM Comment [7]: I
 added
 this
 comment
 to
  give
 more
 examples
 of
 why
 people
 would
  have
 chosen
 the
 white
 iPhone.
  Jenna Price 12/6/11 9:05 PM Deleted: . Beth Caruso 10/7/11 11:00 AM Comment [8]: Although
 you
 seem
 to
  contain
 the
 updates
 within
 this
 paragraph,
  and
 you
 do
 give
 an
 introductory
 sentence
 to
  show
 that,
 work
 on
 analyzing
 the
 ideas
 you
  have
 here,
 rather
 than
 just
 telling
 about
  them.
 The
 paragraph
 will
 sound
 less
 like
 a
  list.
  Beth Caruso 10/7/11 11:01 AM Comment [9]: You
 may
 want
 to
 talk
 more
  about
 the
 iPhone
 before
 you
 get
 into
  another
 text.
 If
 you
 clearly
 articulate
 your
  ideas
 about
 the
 iPhone
 and
 analyze
 its
  characteristics,
 your
 paper
 will
 then
  naturally
 open
 itself
 to
 inquiry
 about
  another
 phone.
  Beth Caruso 10/7/11 11:02 AM Comment [10]: Be
 sure
 you
 are
 closing
  your
 paragraphs.
 Rather
 than
 just
 dropping
  a
 paragraph
 after
 your
 last
 idea,
 give
 a
  wrap-­‐up
 of
 the
 main
 idea
 of
 the
 paragraph.
  Jenna Price 12/6/11 9:08 PM
Comment [11]: I
 added
 this
 comment
 to
  “close”
 the
 paragraph.
 

Jenna Price 12/6/11 9:09 PM Comment [12]: I
 rearranged
 this
  sentence
 to
 clean
 it
 up
 a
 little
 bit.
  Beth Caruso 10/7/11 11:04 AM Comment [13]: Rather
 than
 including
  this,
 since
 most
 people
 now
 (who
 would
 be
  reading
 about
 an
 iPhone)
 would
 know
 about
  gigabytes,
 you
 can
 just
 include
 a
 phrase
  after
 the
 word
 in
 the
 previous
 sentence.
  Ex:
 …
 how
 many
 gigabytes,
 or
 how
 big
 of
 a
  storage
 capacity
 you
 wish
 to
 have
 on
 your
  iPhone.
  Jenna Price 12/5/11 10:42 PM Deleted: Jenna Price 12/5/11 10:43 PM
Deleted: Gigabyte is “a measure of storage capacity equal to 1 billion.”

Price 3
Beth Caruso 10/7/11 11:04 AM

pictures, videos, songs, etc. I chose the thirty-two gigabyte so that I would be provided a lot of space to keep the memorable moments, my favorite songs, and other special things that define me. The prices seem to rise with every new version of iPhone that comes out. This is because each iPhone is more updated and has a lot more features than the previous one. The iPhone 4 is very protected with insurance. Some people choose not to buy insurance on their iPhone, but I strongly recommend that they do. If the iPhone is dropped, cracked, etc. it will be replaced by a new iPhone with no questions asked! There are also many cover cases that are invented specifically for the iPhone. The cases come in any color or texture and they all work very well in protecting the iPhone. The Apple Company has thought about the many ways of protection and what is easiest for the buyers. However, my only suggestion would be to lower the prices of the protective hardware. A neat feature of the iPhone is facetime. Facetime enables you to chat with friends through an online video chat but it is completely mobile. Out of all the versions of the iPhone, the iPhone 4 is the only one that provides facetime. Skype is a very commonly used video chatting application. Skype is something used on a computer where you can “video chat” with one another. It allows two people to talk back and forth while being able to see the other person’s face and hear their voice. Facetime is very similar to skype except for facetime can be used anywhere and everywhere as long as wireless is present! Facetime is already built into the iPhone and ready for use as soon as the iPhone is purchased. The only disadvantage that comes with facetime is it can only be used with someone else who has an iPhone. Another really cool feature that comes automatically with purchasing the iPhone 4 is the built-in iPod. An iPod is an MP3 player that carries music so that music can be heard on the go.

Comment [14]: Why
 does
 this
 matter?
  Does
 this
 influence
 the
 purpose
 of
 the
 phone
  and
 how
 it
 works?
 

Jenna Price 12/6/11 9:09 PM Comment [15]: I
 added
 this
 comment
 to
  show
 why
 it
 matters
 to
 have
 a
 lot
 of
 space.
  Beth Caruso 10/7/11 11:06 AM Comment [16]: This
 paragraph
 seems
 to
  be
 about
 benefits
 and
 downfalls
 of
 the
  iPhone,
 but
 you
 need
 to
 give
 analysis
 of
 it
  and
 possibly
 make
 suggestions
 about
 how
 it
  could
 be
 better.
  Jenna Price 12/6/11 9:12 PM Comment [17]: I
 added
 this
 sentence
 to
  show
 how
 the
 Apple
 Company
 is
 working
  everyday
 to
 better
 improve
 the
 iPhone.
  Jenna Price 12/6/11 9:13 PM
Comment [18]: I
 changed
 this
 around
 so
  the
 attention
 wouldn’t
 be
 all
 on
 me.
 

Beth Caruso 10/7/11 11:06 AM Comment [19]: This
 sentence
 acts
 as
  filler
 and
 calls
 attention
 to
 you,
 rather
 than
  to
 the
 phone.
  Jenna Price 12/5/11 10:51 PM Deleted: As mentioned at the top of the paper, I would like to elaborate more on the ... [1] Beth Caruso 10/7/11 11:06 AM Comment [20]: This
 is
 extremely
  conversational.
  Jenna Price 12/5/11 10:52 PM
Deleted: Has anyone ever heard of skype? If not,

Jenna Price 12/5/11 10:52 PM Deleted: s Jenna Price 12/6/11 9:13 PM Comment [21]: I
 took
 the
 below
  comment
 out
 because
 it
 seemed
 pointless.
  Jenna Price 12/6/11 9:13 PM Deleted: For example: if you have an iPhone and your friend has a droid, then you ... [2] Beth Caruso 10/7/11 11:08 AM
Comment [22]: Begin
 a
 new
 paragraph,
  since
 you
 begin
 a
 new
 idea.
 

Beth Caruso 10/7/11 11:08 AM Comment [23]: Conversational
  Jenna Price 12/5/11 10:52 PM Formatted: Indent: First line: 0.5" Jenna Price 12/5/11 10:53 PM Deleted: Surely everyone has heard of an iPod? If not, Jenna Price 12/5/11 10:53 PM
Deleted: a

Price 4 When the iPhone 4 is purchased, earphones are part of the package deal. Simply plug the earphones into the iPhone and begin listening to music. If a phone call happens to come through while the music is playing, the music will stop and the phone call can be taken. Leave the earphones in and you can hear the caller through the earphones! The iPod is a really big plus when purchasing the iPhone. Not only do you receive a cell phone, but an iPod as well! This feature reminds me of the phrase “knocking out two birds with one stone” because the iPhone contains two great inventions for the price of one. The iPhone also comes with an app store. The app store contains many categories to choose from. The categories are as follows; games, entertainment, utilities, social networking, music, productivity, lifestyle, reference, travel, sports, navigation, health & fitness, news, photo & video, finance, business, education, weather, books and medical. The app store is an awesome feature that only requires a username and password to download anything that is desired! While some apps require money, there are plenty of apps that are free to download. Some of the more popular apps are the social networking apps such as Facebook, twitter, or MySpace. Instead of going to the Internet, typing in facebook.com then typing in a username and password, why not just download the Facebook app? With one touch on the Facebook app, it will go straight to the desired page, making your facebook account viewable and accessible at any time, just like it would be on the computer. The iPhone 4 is very popular for its text messaging and e-mail. The text messaging is very fast and simple. It has a setting that is called “auto-correct”. Auto-correct makes the text messaging on an iPhone a lot more enjoyable. While in a hurry, if a misspelled word is typed the auto-correct will automatically correct the spelling. Like any piece of technical equipment, there will always be a few defaults and auto-correct might not catch every mistake or change it to the
Beth Caruso 10/7/11 11:10 AM Comment [27]: Does
 it
 always
 work?
  Think
 of
 all
 of
 those
 websites
 dedicated
 to
  autocorrect
 gone
 wrong.
  Beth Caruso 10/7/11 11:09 AM Comment [26]: Why
 does
 this
 matter?
  Rather
 than
 just
 summarizing
 the
 features,
  give
 analysis.
  Beth Caruso 10/7/11 11:09 AM Comment [24]: Rather
 than
 just
  commenting
 on
 this
 as
 being
 a
 good
 thing,
  tell
 why
 it
 is
 a
 good
 thing
 and
 how
 it
 is
  perfect
 for
 achieving
 the
 purpose
 it
 set
 out
  to
 achieve.
  Jenna Price 12/5/11 10:54 PM Deleted: Jenna Price 12/6/11 9:14 PM
Comment [25]: By
 adding
 this
 sentence,
 I
  gave
 an
 example
 of
 why
 the
 iPhone
 is
 so
  “great”
 

Price 5 word that you desire. Another neat feature involving the text messaging is the fact that when a new message is received, it pops up on the front of the phone with whom the message is from and what the message reads. If you do not like this feature then it is very simple to remove just by going to the “settings” section of the iPhone. The e-mail is extremely easy to set up. The iPhone settings guide the user right through the process. Many business people have more than one email, one for their personal life and one for the business side of things. No worries, with the iPhone 4 both emails can be set up to come straight to the iPhone! This is what makes the email feature so popular. The iPhone 4 is produced by the “Apple” company and is known all around the world. There has already been talk about an iPhone 5 coming to stores very soon. With all the features and the opportunities that the iPhone 4 already carries, it is hard to imagine the company producing a newer, better version of the iPhone. We will just have to wait and see. Technology surprises us everyday!
Beth Caruso 10/7/11 11:13 AM Comment [29]: Jenna,
 
  You
 include
 some
 excellent
 ideas
 within
 this
  paper,
 but
 my
 main
 suggestion
 for
 you
  would
 be
 to
 analyze
 what
 you
 say,
 rather
  than
 just
 continuing
 to
 talk
 about
 how
 good
  these
 features
 are.
 How
 did
 these
 features
  make
 the
 iPhone
 what
 it
 is?
 How
 well
 is
 the
  concept
 of
 a
 smartphone
 achieved
 through
  this
 iPhone?
  Also,
 be
 aware
 of
 the
 language
 you
 use
 to
  talk
 about
 your
 ideas.
 You
 have
 a
 great
 deal
  of
 informal
 language
 choices,
 which
 we
 can
  certainly
 work
 on
 together,
 if
 you
 need
 help
  with
 them.
 
  You
 have
 a
 great
 paper
 here.
 Just
 be
 sure
 to
  analyze,
 rather
 than
 summarize.
 
  -­‐Ms.
 C
 

Jenna Price 12/6/11 9:17 PM Comment [28]: I
 tried
 to
 add
 this
  comment
 to
 show
 that
 auto-­‐correct
 does
 not
  ALWAYS
 work.
 

Price 6

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